TIME SQUARE BOMB SCARE (poem/rap) feedback PLEASE

ExistentialToker

Active Member
so I’m watching the news, hearing shit about some terrorist dude
a middle eastern in the city, NYC, coming out of Connecticut
driving that Nissan with the bombs in the back of it
his intentions are unknown to the public, says the media
who seems to be deceivin ya, I aint believin what I’m seein, na.

conspiracy theories run through my mind as I try to decide
if what I’m seein is right, who is in on it and who is kept out tight
not knowing a single thing about the world and what’s going on at night
cause they don’t wanna tell you, let you know we all equal,
and you could be the beginning to this worlds next sequel,

politicians givin ghostwritten speeches and each one of em teaches
a subliminal mind control over the masses, keepin em from risin
above all these lies n making changes to all the classes
bringing up a new generation without so much tension

I’m sick of the lies, I’m sick of not being able to turn on the TV and trust what I see
gray haired men in suits with pins on em, to make ya think that they educated and full of wisdom
young ladies, dressed in v necks so low im seein their titties, and below them
cause who wants to hear a whole lotta nothin comin from some old bitties, not all the old men watchin msnbc to see all them pretty ladies, just givin the station they ratings =]

we live in a world created to create, you live in a world created to create you
they put ideas on your plate before you even sit down at the table, I stay away cause I sense that bullshit isn’t stable
and for those of you who feed on what they give you, thanks for keepin the world how it is and givin it a reason to hate you.

two bodies of land separated by water, two bodies of life separated by color
two bodies of mind separated by what, two bodies of shape separated by what (nothing)

Stan Kenny Cartman and Kyle getting shit for Muhammad goin bear style
it was a fuckin joke if anything, and if you knew behind the show there was meaning
far different from yours I doubt you’d be plotting, a god damn thing,
we live in a modern world possibly different from yours, you can’t take that shit seriously,
do you even realize, kids in this country don’t even know who Muhammad be
but I totally understand your hate towards such an equally, ignorant society,
we aint no different and we aint no better so who the fuck is to say shit, not me! Bombs Away!
 

Kimosobey

Member
Huge fan... kinda got the immortal technique rap in it, but yeahh i dig it, my ryhme suck compared to yours
 

ExistentialToker

Active Member
thanks dude im sure they dont suck... i think all my shit sucks and everyone says the opposite.. its like since it comes from within ourselves we have less respect for it or soemthing... idk i know i respect other peoples work mroe than mine.
 

one11

Active Member
thanks dude im sure they dont suck... i think all my shit sucks and everyone says the opposite.. its like since it comes from within ourselves we have less respect for it or soemthing... idk i know i respect other peoples work mroe than mine.
haha your right.. it takes other people to help us understand what we have in us a lot of times.
 
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